Today we had the whole day to do the Maori who changed the world. We had to compare when the day was back then to now. We had to talk about the famous Maori person and we had to make a Whakauki. They had to walk everywhere compared to cars. Here is a fact he died after a long battle with cancer and when he died was 54. His name is Dalvanius Prime. My work about my Whakauki. Here is my link to Maori who changed the world.
Kia Ora Tygaleah
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